Finally, the day comes round to Grassy's:
Faith views the tilting pricks and shaven groins,
tuts with the others at the sordid scene,
the squalid pumping of the actors' loins.
Stern-faced she watches like a widowed queen
and feels with pique, as personal affront,
I wonder if a personal affront would work as well.
And will Faith works, I almost want another introduced, a new character, but
probalby not.
hush/trash or hush/garbage - the better rhyme
Enough nitting. I really hope you find a publisher, mainstream as possible.
Thanks.
Gary
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sí, balas no!
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