Grassy,
Enjoyed reading this. Endues is in my dictionary and fits with rhyme as an
asset. Don't feel you need to change it because it is okay as it is, but if
you did wish there are simpler words with a straighter connection to what I
think you want to say. My dict. has it as take in or digest mentally, but a
word like endow (an outgoing process) would maintain the semantic drive of
the first line of S2. Course it could be that you want the reversal (x is y
and y is x). Just a thought.
Colin
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From: "grasshopper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, April 16, 2003 2:17 AM
Subject: New sub: Black Britain
> Black Britain
>
>
> Seventy percent of the clothes here
> are black, he says.
>
> Do not wear black,
> he says, your eyes breathe it in.
> It poisons joy.
>
> Black gives you the blues and blues
> endue black feelings.
> He wraps himself in gold and orange.
>
> On Mondays,
> Moondays,
> he wears grey and silver,
>
> but never black.
>
> grasshopper
>
>
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