Hi Colin,
Thanks for your comments, glad you enjoyed the poem.
Best wishes, Mike
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Mike,
I agree with Deb. This poem supports a cluster of associated meanings, related in theme, which is a good thing IMO. I also like it. I wonder if the sound effects could do with a bit of tweaking. There is a sense, especially at he beginning of a rhythm building up, which dissipates towards the end, but this could be intentional, the rower getting into rough water. Odd sentences such as "the waves buffet with a wilful persistence" sound a bit awkward, but this is a small criticism of a poem which I have enjoyed a great deal and which remains interesting on re-reading. Row on, I say.
Colin
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