David,

I like the first line but I think that the rest of S1 and some other parts
poem need a little work. Jupiter absorbed the HB comet, but chewing
mountains? gathering planets? an infant sun? If we travelled out in space
faster than light we could see the past, but the future? I suppose if you
went fast enough for long enough the rest of the world would be ahead by a
small amount of time and so in this sense, you would have moved into the
future if you returned to base. The closed universe (moving in a straight
line brings you back to the beginning) is still a theory, isn't it, though I
could be out of date. I suppose my over-riding impression is not that this
poem digs deep or reaches far but that it doesn't go far enough. Good topic
though and I hope you will mine it for all its worth.


Colin


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From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, April 14, 2003 5:59 AM
Subject: Cause--


> Jupiter is growing
> chewing mountains
> gathering planets
> an infant sun
>
> the proof is in
> how old light is
>
>
> look far enough away
> who's past can we see
>
> look far enough away
> who's future can we see
>
> would it matter
> which way we are moving
> which end of the circle is a cycle
>
> from Jupiter to
> an atom
> a circle
> a cycle
> a loop
> oval or round
>
> in the largest telescopes
> beginnings and ends are light pictures
>
> why can we see them
> why imagination
>
> why can we learn
> why can we build
>
> why can we do what we do
> why are we labelled
> with our tags and numbers
>
> running through the pasture
> passing out wool
>
> where will  power go
> when the last
> of the oil is pumped
> from the ground
> and the soot rains
> that blacken raincoats
> turn trees brown
>
> Mars?
>
> cause--
> an infant sun
> gathering planets
> chewing mountains
> Jupiter is growing
>
> light is
> how old
>
> can we see the past
> light that was
>
> can we see the future
> light will be
>
> which end of the cycle is the circle
> would it matter which way we are moving
>
> a green grape to Jupiter
> how much has
> a circle
> a cycle
> a loop
> is round
> or oval
>
> in the largest telescopes
> beginnings and ends are light pictures
>
> we can learn
> we can build
>
>
> why are we labelled
> with more tags and numbers
>
> running through pastures
> dying like sheep
>
>