Thanks for the critique; always helpful.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 04.14.03 11:51:13 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Ryf,
What an interesting poem. My favourite part is "Laughing we cry as hot meets
sweet". This is resonant and condensed to good effect. My least favourite is
"Today bright as divinity eastern clouds portend another fate" as it sounds
a bit fulsome, IMHO. (pot calling the kettle black).
Colin
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