Shah,
thanks for the comment which I appreciate greatly.
Colin
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From: "c s shah" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, April 08, 2003 2:46 AM
Subject: Re: newsub/walk
> Hi Colin,
> Nice poem. I liked it.
>
> > Beware of the storm that blows from the North,
> > how gathers the blindness of night,
> > for lost on the moors is many a life.
>
> These lines are not clear.
>
> > with crystals of quartz, of iron pyrites
> > and pale copper blue...
>
> Here second 'of' does not suit the rhythm.
>
> c s shah
>
>
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