Dear Deborah,
This is a workshopping list. We point out things we like and don't
like, with no intention of taking anybody's work over.
Frankly, we're too busy working on our own poems.
Presumably ,if you post to a workshopping list, you're soliciting feedback,
and this often involves negative comments. That's just the nature of the
beast.
There are plenty of 'Thank For Sharing ' lists, where everything is praised
automatically, but this isn't one of them.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Deborah Russell" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, April 08, 2003 7:32 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] Hello, This is my first post
> I think if I prefer to use thee, it is fine, otherwise I would be writing
> your poem.
>
>
> Dear Deborah,
> Welcome to the list.
> Iread your explanation to Roger, and it would make sense if your
grandmother
> was writing the poem-- but not otherwise. In any case, if you use 'thee',
> shouldn't 'your' became 'thy' ? -or it's not consistent.
> I am a great fan of the sonnet form, but I believe a modern sonnet should
be
> written in modern language, unless there is some very good reason why
> archaisms are used. In general, I don't like contemporary poems in
'antique'
> diction, as if the verse is caught in a time-slip. Often it's used as a
> justification of awkward inversions, and words like 'woe' which are
> rhyme-led.
> Kind regards,
> grasshopper
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Roger Collett" <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Tuesday, April 08, 2003 6:28 PM
> Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] Hello, This is my first post
>
>
> > > I use thee, because my grandmother used thee, as well as, other
members
> of
> > > my maternal and paternal family, including both parents.
> > >
> >
> > Sorry Deborah,
> > I do realise that this form of address is still in use in some parts,
but
> it
> > always strikes me as incongruous.
> >
> > Your sonnet has a rather lovely haunting aura to it.
> > Like it a lot.
> >
> > Roger.
> >
>
>
>
>
>
>
> Deborah Elizabeth Russell, Artist/Poet
>
> Post Poems | Inside | Cityslide
> Shadow Poetry | Parallels Words For The Wind
>
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