I think if I prefer to use thee, it is fine, otherwise I would be writing
your poem.
Dear Deborah,
Welcome to the list.
Iread your explanation to Roger, and it would make sense if your grandmother
was writing the poem-- but not otherwise. In any case, if you use 'thee',
shouldn't 'your' became 'thy' ? -or it's not consistent.
I am a great fan of the sonnet form, but I believe a modern sonnet should be
written in modern language, unless there is some very good reason why
archaisms are used. In general, I don't like contemporary poems in 'antique'
diction, as if the verse is caught in a time-slip. Often it's used as a
justification of awkward inversions, and words like 'woe' which are
rhyme-led.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Roger Collett" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, April 08, 2003 6:28 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] Hello, This is my first post
> > I use thee, because my grandmother used thee, as well as, other members
of
> > my maternal and paternal family, including both parents.
> >
>
> Sorry Deborah,
> I do realise that this form of address is still in use in some parts, but
it
> always strikes me as incongruous.
>
> Your sonnet has a rather lovely haunting aura to it.
> Like it a lot.
>
> Roger.
>
Deborah Elizabeth Russell, Artist/Poet
Post Poems | Inside | Cityslide
Shadow Poetry | Parallels Words For The Wind
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