Hi Deborah,
Welcome to a slightly and I mean only slightly more sane list.
Re your sonnet,
I wonder why you are using the archaic form *thee*?
The sonnet seems to bring out this type of language in people for some
strange reason. Also, typo in line 7 should be radiant, but then as listees
will tell you, I am just a nitpicker.
Roger
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From: "Deborah Russell" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, April 08, 2003 5:37 PM
Subject: Hello, This is my first post
> I know several of the poets, here, from various lists, there are also many
> poets, on this list, I haven't 'met'. So, hello everyone, (standing) my
name
> is Deborah Russell, and I am a poet.
>
> Everyone says, hello.
>
> She fumbles through papers, trips on the leg of her folding chair, noise
> echoes thunderously, suddenly stops - followed by an exaggerated silence.
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> She takes the podium and begins a short, yet boring account of her poem.
>
> One poet is asleep, in the front row, one is glaring, as if her clumsiness
> was a direct and personal insult. Another poet is smiling; reading his own
> poetry, others are coughing, scuffing their feet, rattling papers and
> laughing nervously, however, silently.
>
> Note:
>
> I like sonnets, though I do need to write this form as well as my
> haiku for many more years, before I'll be satisfied with my work.
>
> - Deborah
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> Would Dreams Realize
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> I brush confusion from my eyes to see,
> Sweeping day's harsh sights, I've not respected;
> This mundane weariness - to dream of thee,
> In moonlit darkness, sights redirected.
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> My shadow dream of shadows, soft to sight,
> How your shadow forms a heavenly glow
> That distill the day with radient light,
> When to dreaming eyes, see your shadow so!
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> And how blessed my eyes, in your presence made
> Would dreams realize thee in each living way,
> As in the deep of night, our shadow's shade
> Entwined a dream to sightless eyes and stay.
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> Dark, shadowless and long; days without thee
> And nights reversed to light, in dreams set free.
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> Deborah Russell, 2003
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