Hi Shah,
I don't know what the first sentance means! But I'm prepared to keep on
reading the poem...
I sort of like it's quaint over-the-top way of saying something - and the
four fingers phrase makes me smile each time I read it...
Do you need to repeat the word illusive? The title and twice in a short poem
is (erm) rather noticable?
Bob
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New: Illusive Heights
>Date: Wed, 2 Apr 2003 11:53:26 +0530
>
>Illusive Heights
>
>With the illusive blue
>you cover the earth,
>hypnotizing me in the process
>of comparisons in heights.
>You are vast and high
>encompassing and supporting
>gods in the heavens,
>and here I raise my hands
>to reach you, O sky,
>always falling short by four fingers -
>the illusive space that makes
>mockery of my attempts.
>
>--
>c s shah
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