Hi Shah,
I'm not sure how to read the "in/to" in the second line! How should I
interpret it?
And the line:
"the house ever appears complete to be."
seems to have the words in the wrong order - and, even with re-arranging the
words, I'm mystified as to what it may mean!
The last line of the poem, too, is so grandiose and distancing and (I dare
to say it,) twee! ... I sort of feel it's the words "some people..." that
aren't strong enough!
And the last stanza feels as if there's too many other possible things that
could have been said - that could be more interesting than what's actually
said. I feel disappointed - I feel that the poem's chickened out of saying
something exciting, or scary, or dark, or profound, and just gone for an
easy option. Sorry.
Bob
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: new sub:Doll's House
>Date: Fri, 4 Apr 2003 07:53:10 +0530
>
>Doll's House
>
>There are no angles, no beams, no columns
>in/to this doll's house.
>It is designed to a plan of 'merry-go-round'.
>
>There are no guns, no knives, nor pointed words,
>a small eraser is the lone weapon
>to smoothen rough lines in a drawing-book.
>
>There are no safe-vaults, nor lock and keys,
>in absence of doors and windows
>the house ever appears complete to be.
>
>Some people label it as ivory tower,
>oblivious to the stark reality:
>here rests, not an arm-chair scholar, but a little girl.
> --
>c s shah
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