The poem appears a bit stretched; could have said the same thing in
lesser words.
"Limpets lickle": alliteration appears a bit artificial and forced.
(Lickle is not found in dictionary.)
"Irish" can be omitted to maintain inherent rhythm.
The "cruel ocean" does not fit, for ocean is a symbol of vastness and
infinity; and vast and deep cannot be cruel.
c s shah
grasshopper wrote:
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> Mermaiden
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> She sits on an pearled imperial rock,
> scaly buttocks snug against the shells.
> Limpets lickle at her fingers, pedicure
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> grasshopper
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