Gary,
Thanks for the honest comment,
Colin
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, April 02, 2003 6:04 PM
Subject: Re: newsub/unborn
Colin, I really do not like
little love nugget
It disrupts the rabbit and the rest of the poem.
In the last three lines I would cut to one and.
Thanks.
Gary
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