Grassy,
A nicely executed sonnet, difficult subject to do well but I think you are
there. I feel *kvetch* is slightly forced, but it may lie better on
subsequent readings.
Roger
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From: "grasshopper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, April 01, 2003 7:00 PM
Subject: New sub: Gut Reaction
> Gut Reaction
>
>
> Red in the bowl again, bright shocking spots,
> beads strung with spittle, ruby mixed with jet.
> Say it's tomato, peppers - there are lots
> of explanations for those blobs. Don't sweat.
> Just wipe your mouth and fill a steady glass.
> The cold tap foams. The water chills your tongue
> and shocks your teeth. Grip this new day. Hold fast.
> Remember how you felt once, fit and young
> before this aged you, greyed your face and bowed
> you down, an acolyte of pain, to retch
> and spew. For now, no grumbling is allowed.
> Stiff upper lip. Don't wimp or whinge. Don't kvetch.
> Wait till the angels lift you up, then yell
> 'Please drop my bloody stomach off in Hell.'
>
> grasshopper
>
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