Hi Christina,
I think I agree with the other comments about the line order at the end of
this one...
As an extra thought ( and, before that thought, I'm thinking why is it that
requim/elegy poems always seem to demand intrwerwoven depths?) - and now the
thought - I was wondering about the phrase "a stones throw" and wondering if
some allusion to those words may be hinted at near the end too... It's not
an essential thought (and if I were being more disciplined I may not have
thought it - it's just a mischevious feelin that I'd like a cliche to do a
bit of extra work: pebbles in the earth-to-earth scattered on the coffin
lid, stones underfoot at the graveside... I'm just playing around here...
but phrases make me do that sometimes)
Bob
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New sub: Peggie
>Date: Fri, 28 Mar 2003 12:53:47 EST
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> Peggie
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> They did her hair and make-up as she lay
> that last night in the Holy Trinity -
> a stone's throw from home and the Social.
> At Mass the stained glass glowed -
> the face of Mary might have been anyone.
> "We put her lighter and Bensons in the coffin.
> She'll have her fags: always first on her list."
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> Then the slow drive past daffodils
> to top soil dry and warm with sunlight.
> The procession counted blessings:
> she wanted to die before this war started;
> the cherry blossom over her grave
> will soon fall as confetti.
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> Today light shines on the stitched suede leaves
> she left in 'The Imitation of Christ'.
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> I wonder if she's home at last?
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