Thanks , Gary. I will adjust the booms as you suggest.Arthur.
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Sunday, March 30, 2003 6:19 PM
Subject: Re: New Sub: The Castle: The Dramatic Monologue
Arthur, you did it again. A suggestion if you please.
Boom!
My cries and curses
humming fists and knuckles’ blood
I would set the Boom!'s off as separate stanzas. They are sound effect not
speech. And would vary them a bit in format, some stronger than others,
some weak.
BOOM!
boom
Boom! Boom!
Thanks.
Gary
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