Hello again Christina,
This is much more your authentic voice IMHO. I like it, it has a touch of the slightly bizarre but it´s not overdone. And it makes the reader (at least this one) feel slightly uneasy. Í like that too, since I´ve acquired that good old famous Finnish masochism after all these years. (Does one `acquire´ masochism? Probably not, but you get my idea.)
Best wishes, Mike
--- Alkuperäinen viesti ---
Iron Rule
The Queen of Catheters has a sharp nose
and quick, disinfected fingers.
She rules flip-flo valves and night bags, dispenses
pale blue Proscar with finasteride and lactose.
You are her clean subjects in unsoiled knickers,
sleeping in tea tree scented sheets.
True, she's often despotic -
it goes with the job-description and antiseptic throne.
Remember this, your wounds no longer weep,
your urine's as clear as uncorked Chardonnay
and soon you'll be free: a twist of the keyhole
and the iron rule will be over.
christina fletcher
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