Hello Ryfkah,
I donīt know whether youīve noticed, but this is the first time that Iīve responded to one of your pieces. The reason that I havenīt done so earlier is because I find it very difficult to get close to your style of writing. I have the same problem now. I really donīt know how to read this. I know this is not very useful feedback - itīs hardly feedback at all- but I wanted you to know that I do read and think about your poems. I just canīt get close to them.
Best wishes, Mike
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The Possibility of Silence
Like the palpitating pains of birth
The sound quickens
Hear bombs crash
Jets rumble
A village shrieks
Like breaking the sound barrier
The noise deafens
A child's cry
Death rattles
Like the meteor showers of summer
Listen to razzmatazz-jazz
The wind wisps
The seas flux
Like a full moon during a Jewish holy day
The sound quells
Deer in carlight gaze
Dandelion feathers drift
Like the expanding cosmos
The hush inside
A bubble rends in the breeze
The birthmark no one sees
An embryo
Nebula
Sun-star
Planets
Moons
Atoms
The possibility of silence to follow
Ryfkah 3/23/03
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