Hi Ryfkah,
Thanks you. the piece certainly loses its way at the end and needs a good
belt around the ears at that point. I haven't fixed it yet, but intend to do
something with it.
Cheers,
Frank
> I really like the true-to-life dialogue in the beginning of your poem but
> then the last stanza seems to have too many words, saying too much.
>
> kol tuv, Ryfkah
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