I always have difficulty with a strict syllabic count, so much bubbling to
be down on paper so little room. The whole point of the exercise was to
explore the strictures and seek that 'smoothness', which in turn implies
improving my art. Also there are some enchanting forms that I have tried for
the first time. Particularly the pantoum and the cinquaine which have great
charm. The sestina is a behemoth and the villanelle a brute worthy of
mastering. I like to think that my ability in free style will be enhanced by
the exercise. Thanks for the suggestions which seem sound to me. Arthur.
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, March 29, 2003 2:51 PM
Subject: Re: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo
Locked with rusted safety bolts the dragon-mawed portcullis gapes.
Silk-pawed willow burgeons on the motte; legions of grass besiege.
Owl calls the watches of the night and the spider keeps the gate.
-Arthur
Arthur, the sijo, a very difficult form. Of the short oriental, maybe the
most difficult. This a bit terse is a couple of places as if forced into
the count. For a smoother read, maybe willows burgeon and an owl calls.
I like.
Thanks.
Gary
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