Hi again, Bob,
I'm not familiar with the Prevert poem, but will chase it up.
I can well see the concerns that Grassy raised. It's a useful caution, but
too late for this piece - it's done! LOL Even knowing, sometimes the mistake
still occurs, and the difficult bit, always, is that some folk like the
work, making it harder to sort out best from worst. Anyway, this one's done
and I'm sure the same course will be avoided (again) for a time.
It really is difficult (for me) drawing the line between sentimental images
that work and are enjoyed by a good many folk (readers) who find that
approach offers something they can relate to in their lives, and the problem
of over-sentimentality that makes other, perhaps more poetically discerning
readers, cringe and vomit. Generally I put myself in the latter category (as
a reader at least), and yet the stuff will still spill from my pen at
unguarded moments. Actually I take it back. I'm not so discerning, I just
cringe a lot LOLOL.
Ah well, part of the tapestry, I suppose.
Cheers and thanks.
Frank
> Hi Frank,
> I'm reminded all the time of a Jaques Prevert poem when I read this
(called
> To Paint The Portrait Of a Bird - which is findable via google) in it's
way
> of mentioning cages, a bird - and the shape of the poem, the length of the
> lines, almost everything!
> And, like grasshopper comments, comparing soldiers to canaries, budgies,
or
> whatever is a tad risky...
> And I didn't know until today that Aussie soldiers are in Iraq. So much TV
> news with so little news.
> Bob
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