I really admire and like all you have done with this castle series. I am not
proficient at anything. I guess simplicity as in haiku no flowery (pun)
words. I hope this explains my thoughts (or could confuse them)
Yours Truly
carol s
----- Original Message -----
From: "arthur seeley" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, March 25, 2003 12:07 AM
Subject: Re: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo( Carol)
> I have to admit the Sijo is new to me Carol. Part of my exploration of
Form
> exercise, which while ranging over a broad spectrum does not concentrate
too
> long on one form nor explore them in depth. This is not a virtue and I
> understand that. Your input and example are helpful. I might agree that
the
> twist is more subtle perhaps than sudden or surprising and I will consider
> that. Not sure about the complicated view though. Still you are clearly
more
> experienced than I if you have written them for years. I find it an
> interesting form as I did the Lu-Shih and will return to them both later I
> am sure.Thank you for your interest, time and response. Regards Arthur
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Carol Sircoulomb" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Tuesday, March 25, 2003 12:02 AM
> Subject: Re: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo( and one added/cs)
>
>
> > Hi ,
> > I have been writing sijo now for several years . This one just seems too
> > complicated . The twist not enough.
> > here is one of mine
> >
> > The cedars along the road arch slightly.
> >
> > A lone elm stands by itself while it holds two moss-covered headstones.
> >
> > Below the gray sky we kiss one last time under the mistletoe.
> >
> >
> >
> > Carol Sircoulomb
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "arthur seeley" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Monday, March 24, 2003 2:20 PM
> > Subject: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo
> >
> >
> > > Sijo
> > >
> > > Locked with rusted safety bolts the dragon-mawed portcullis gapes.
> > > Silk-pawed willow burgeons on the motte; legions of grass besiege.
> > > Owl calls the watches of the night and the spider keeps the gate.
>
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