Hi Frank,
A finely drawn snapshot that stays in the mind. And I'm amazed at how you've
caught the sensitivty of his friends as well. Thanks for the read, I think
it works well.
Bob
>From: Frank Prem <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub - an accustomed gaze
>Date: Wed, 19 Mar 2003 23:21:38 +1100
>
>It's a while since I subbed anything and I've lost track of what was last -
>sincerely hope I'm not doubling up. This piece is a couple of weeks old and
>has already had some workshopping, but I was amazed at the number of
>changes I made preparing it for this email. Sometimes they're never quite
>done.
>
>Cheers,
>
>Frank
>
>~~~~~~~~~~
>an accustomed gaze
>
>he is standing at the window
>staring hard across beach road
>past the yellow buoy
>that marks the channel
>away to the distance
>of geelong
>
>the restaurant is a rattle around him
>but he has left his party
>the gun-metal blue
>of the water
>as the sun goes down
>has caught him
>drawn him to this sight
>of the bay at evening
>
>it is obvious at a glance
>he needs to be there
>one with the rocking waters
>tense hunger
>in the clench of jaw
>and forward leaning posture
>tuned
>to near-flight
>
>only for a moment
>then gone
>replaced by a sigh
>a softer gaze
>and a brief contact
>of fingertips to glass
>before return to a place
>at table
>re-engagement
>through light conversation
>
>there is no comment passed
>they are accustomed
>to his ways
>
>~
>
>Frank
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