I have to admit the Sijo is new to me Carol. Part of my exploration of Form
exercise, which while ranging over a broad spectrum does not concentrate too
long on one form nor explore them in depth. This is not a virtue and I
understand that. Your input and example are helpful. I might agree that the
twist is more subtle perhaps than sudden or surprising and I will consider
that. Not sure about the complicated view though. Still you are clearly more
experienced than I if you have written them for years. I find it an
interesting form as I did the Lu-Shih and will return to them both later I
am sure.Thank you for your interest,  time and response. Regards Arthur
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From: "Carol Sircoulomb" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, March 25, 2003 12:02 AM
Subject: Re: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo( and one added/cs)


> Hi ,
> I have been writing sijo now for several years . This one just seems too
> complicated . The twist not enough.
> here is one of mine
>
> The cedars along the road arch slightly.
>
> A lone elm stands by itself while it holds two moss-covered headstones.
>
> Below the gray sky we kiss one last  time under the mistletoe.
>
>
>
> Carol Sircoulomb
>
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> From: "arthur seeley" <[log in to unmask]>
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> Sent: Monday, March 24, 2003 2:20 PM
> Subject: New sub: The Castle: the Sijo
>
>
> > Sijo
> >
> > Locked with rusted safety bolts the dragon-mawed  portcullis gapes.
> > Silk-pawed willow burgeons on the motte; legions of grass besiege.
> > Owl calls the watches of the night and the spider keeps the gate.