On the surface a touching vignette but I am uneasy at you ascribing to her a
despair you are only guessing at or if you knew of it there was no hint of
your knowledge before the last lines.This is a graceful piece but with this
rider.Regards Arthur.
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From: "Colin dewar" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, March 24, 2003 6:32 PM
Subject: newsub/salesgirl
> Salesgirl Smile
>
>
> I do not blame you for your falseness,
> your well-conditioned hair,
> an ever-willing handshake
> and that dazzling smile.
> If life must mark us-
> coalminer's hands, doctor's health,
> you merely stand to lose sincerity.
> To lose only this is accomplishment.
>
>
> So I don't know why it makes me sad
> to see that enamelled smile.
> Perhaps your radiant glow
> is worse than ill-intent,
> knows darkness so deep
> not even love can escape,
> because you lean to me like a flower
> collapsing under its own weight of sweetness,
> ever-sinking, ever-rising to lift itself
> from a colourless despair.
>
>
>
> Tokyo, April 1995
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