Hi shah,
I've just discovered two more of yours! This one nearly got deleted before I
read it again!
I like the first two lines - they seem to say so much more than the rest,
and say it without really trying. The rest doesn't seem as clear, or (like
clear water) as deep!
Bob
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: The Castle
>Date: Sat, 22 Mar 2003 09:59:23 +0530
>
>The Castle
>
>monumental past
>dying a slow death.
>*
>
>dilapidated expression
>of aging emotions.
>*
>
>relic standing mute witness,
>as a poetic expression,
>to its past glory.
>*
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