Hi Shah,
I think this is the weakest of the poets you've submitted (that I'm replying
to now). But maybe it's just me - cos I can't think of an oasis that drifts,
and I don't know how long it would take an oasis to drift anywhere...
It may be, therefore, that it's not the poem that's at fault but my
imagination that can't cope with water and palm trees drifting across the
desert.
And does sand fossilise?
(Aaaah, it's toooo early in the week for such questions!!!!!!!, bring on the
encyclopedias and the caffine... Aaaaah!!!)
Bob
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: The Shifting Sand
>Date: Thu, 20 Mar 2003 23:37:40 +0530
>
>The Shifting Sand
>
>On the shifting sand of emotions
>we have built our relationship:
>a drifting oasis.
>It shelters us and is secure
>for the time being. But soon
>it would move with the caravan
>in search of the solid terrain
>where foundation will be firm
>but emotions would fossilize,
>like those marble statues
>that exhibit anatomical beauty
>sans the vitality of life.
>--
>
>c s shah
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