Hi shah,
Not just monsoons, and rivers, and oceans, and oasises, but snow too!
But I'm sorry shah, I feel this one isn't working too well for me. I've just
read Mike's post, and the other post about the jeans, (and I needn't repeat
what they say), but the way it seems to want to end itself seems unconnected
to the way things start.
It could be that merely linking the white snow of the start and the white
light refracted in the prism near the end isn't enough to make the thing
cohere.
(It's also interesting that you're using full stops - but no capital letters
- except at the first line! - and I'm not sure how to read it...)
Bob
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: The Rainbow
>Date: Sun, 23 Mar 2003 07:07:40 +0530
>
>The Rainbow
>
>Yellow leaves
>drop from a twig,
>colouring the snow.
>
>crimson kites
>float in the sky,
>reminiscent of a past.
>
>blue jeans
>contemplates in silence,
>gestates estrangement.
>
>primal prism
>refracts the white,
>universe is the rainbow.
>--
>
>c s shah
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