CS, poems will all questions are difficult and take great care. I would
drop the * and commas in line ones.
did a swan fly by,
that darkness appears
a little less?
*
has an eye cried,
that the load weighs
a pound less?
less used over, maybe- the load/is lighter or such
To me questions need at least one answer.
Luck.
Gary
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