Hi Ryfkah,
I like this poem. I think it could be more effective if you deleted the
first stanza and went straight into "The man plays piano...". Rather
ambivalent about the scripture repeat at the end but I'd have to leave that
uip to you.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New: The Player
>Date: Mon, 17 Mar 2003 23:22:49 EST
>
>The Player
>
>Blessed art Thou O Lord
>King of the Universe
>Who is the True Judge
>
>The man plays piano
>Beethoven
>as black hats beards
>women youngsters
>babies
>parade to the left
>to the right
>
>He once davaned
>for peace
>Oseh shalom
>he once prayed
>Now he plays
>ebony
>and bone
>
>Often in the dark
>like stacked porcelain
>lice ravaged
>he meets skeletons
>in black hats and beards
>He wraps a remembered
>prayer shawl around his heart
>kisses tzizi fringes
>as if the lips of somebody's
>grandchild another's mother
>
>He switches to Wagner
>
>Dare he play next what is taboo
>Is this the fruit posed by
>the snake or is he to be made free
>Eden's return
>
>Blessed art Thou O Lord
>King of the Universe
>Who is the True Judge
>
>
>Ryfkah 3/17/03
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