In a message dated 03/20/2003 10:19:50 AM Central Standard Time,
[log in to unmask] writes:
<< as monsoon kept its appointment. (as the) >>
Good job, Gary. I wouldn't cut "as the" though as the cut makes the line
sound unnatural. That is just my thinking. In fact, I would probably say "as
the monsoon came." Most of us know these are heavy rains that appear at
certain times. But it is not my poem, and we have to keep that in mind. Sue
|