Shah, welcome. Suggestions from the West.
Clouds came from the West (no cap on West)
as monsoon kept its appointment. (as the)
I wasn't ready with my poems yet; (no yet)(, vs ;)
said: "won't you come later? (cap Won't) (and said)
You may visit her first,
she needs you more,
for I see her eyes are tired."
Best of luck.
Gary
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Margaret Hodge and Gary poems for kids at:
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http://www.writershood.com/..... Poets for Peace.... ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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