Interesting pieces Shah. The repeated "that" is obviously intentional. I
wonder if it is a little contrived here and whether it is the strongest word
to use in this formulation for short poems where every word is incredibly
important.
bw
James
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: short poems
>Date: Wed, 19 Mar 2003 13:10:39 +0530
>
>Thanks Grassy,
>Address me as Shah.
>
>Short Poems 3
>
>did a swan fly by,
>that darkness appears
>a little less?
>*
>has an eye cried,
>that the load weighs
>a pound less?
>*
>did a bell toll,
>that feet rustle
>at a slower pace?
>*
>
>c s shah
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