Hi Frank,
No longer "Faust"? Yes, the poem has an air of confidence that says things
are under control from the poet's end, though there is the clear
underpinning chaos in the subjects life coming through quite effectively.
The sense of impulsiveness could be increased considerably in s4 by thaking
out the first line. Welcome back.
bw
James
>From: Frank Prem <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub - an accustomed gaze
>Date: Wed, 19 Mar 2003 23:21:38 +1100
>
>It's a while since I subbed anything and I've lost track of what was last -
>sincerely hope I'm not doubling up. This piece is a couple of weeks old and
>has already had some workshopping, but I was amazed at the number of
>changes I made preparing it for this email. Sometimes they're never quite
>done.
>
>Cheers,
>
>Frank
>
>~~~~~~~~~~
>an accustomed gaze
>
>he is standing at the window
>staring hard across beach road
>past the yellow buoy
>that marks the channel
>away to the distance
>of geelong
>
>the restaurant is a rattle around him
>but he has left his party
>the gun-metal blue
>of the water
>as the sun goes down
>has caught him
>drawn him to this sight
>of the bay at evening
>
>it is obvious at a glance
>he needs to be there
>one with the rocking waters
>tense hunger
>in the clench of jaw
>and forward leaning posture
>tuned
>to near-flight
>
>only for a moment
>then gone
>replaced by a sigh
>a softer gaze
>and a brief contact
>of fingertips to glass
>before return to a place
>at table
>re-engagement
>through light conversation
>
>there is no comment passed
>they are accustomed
>to his ways
>
>~
>
>Frank
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