Hi cs
We're all novices here, so join the club. Once we stop learning there is no
art. On your poem I'd suggest you could missout the third line, it's false
modesty, and tidy they rest to fit in. Hope this helps.
bw
James
>From: c s shah <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: intro.
>Date: Tue, 18 Mar 2003 12:19:14 +0530
>
>I hope you won't mind one novice amongst you!
>
>c s shah
>M 55
>India
>--
>
>The Wait
>
>Clouds came from the West
>as monsoon kept its appointment.
>I wasn't ready with my poems yet;
>said: "won't you come later?
>You may visit her first,
>she needs you more,
>for I see her eyes are tired."
>*
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