Interesting slant Terri. Yes the last two lines are refutable.
Thanks for the crit and keep it coming.
Colin
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> I like the political metaphor in S1
> If it were mine, I'd cut the explanatory two final lines and let the
message
> remain subversive and less refutable
>
> Terri )O(
>
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> Sent: 14 March 2003 18:51
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>
> The Tractor and the Dandelion
>
> Who would have thought it likely
> the tractor and dandelion
> would inhabit the same field,
> poet and tyrant tread the same path,
> agent of change live with the unchanging
> in this recurrent game?
>
> Even as advancing metal
> expunges the living plant
> the dandelion spreads its seeds to further fields.
> Leaves sprout anew amid rusting wrecks.
> Long after the assassin's bullet
> the words of dead men rise from the grave.
>
>
>
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>
> Colin
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