No worries,
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, March 15, 2003 3:13 PM
Subject: Re: New sub: An Endorsement For Patricia(Colin)
> Thanks Colin. Others sem to feel the same way.
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> bw
> James
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> >From: Colin dewar <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: New sub: An Endorsement For Patricia
> >Date: Sat, 15 Mar 2003 09:19:35 -0000
> >
> >James,
> >
> >You will know by now that this form is prone to a slightly jarring effect
> >which can be offset by judicious use of enjambment.
> >
> >Glad to hear that you parted on amicable terms. No broken bones by the
> >sound
> >of it.
> >
> >This is a hard form to perform well and so certain contrivances in
language
> >that would normally be frowned upon can be forgiven. However one line
goes
> >too far IMO. "Our public tongue work may have caused one seizure". It's
> >amusing, yes, but it sounds too awkward.
> >
> >BW
> >
> >Colin
> >
> >
> >
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: <[log in to unmask]>
> >Sent: Friday, March 14, 2003 8:52 AM
> >Subject: New sub: An Endorsement For Patricia
> >
> >
> > > This is based on a relationship I had with someone who is now in the
> >acting
> > > profession. We parted on fairly amicable terms, I think.
> > >
> > > AN ENDORSEMENT FOR PATRICIA
> > >
> > > Kissing Patricia was something of great pleasure
> > > although she was someone whom I hardly knew,
> > > for our love was fickle, like the weather.
> > >
> > > When our lips bonded with tight measure
> > > for months, during which our bodies drew
> > > close together, was something of great pleasure.
> > >
> > > Still, our frantic kissing was not a treasure,
> > > tight clinches in the park our only due,
> > > for our love was fickle, like the weather.
> > >
> > > Our public tongue work may have caused one seizure,
> > > though we were oblivious at attempts to sue
> > > for kissing Patricia was something of great pleasure.
> > >
> > > When we decided to split it was such a clever
> > > career move, something we never knew
> > > was inevitable for fickle love, like the weather.
> > >
> > > Now she'd love to become a fickle national treasure
> > > and I've written this for her and all of you
> > > to say: kissing Patricia was a great pleasure
> > > though our love was fickle, like the weather.
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > bw
> > > James
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
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