Hi Bob,

 I originally indented the 'and shampoo' line because I was working on a
small notepad, literally one provided by a hotel the other half stayed in.
It kind of stuck but isn't necessary.
No, I hadn't noticed the extra gaps betwwen 'thaat' and 'you'. What time of
night did I send it, I wonder?!

I wrote it as if it were from my husband, in his hotel room, to me. Perhaps
the real I (the writer) gets in somewhere as well. Is that what you mean?

Glad you spotted the irony of  'subtle'. I mentioned people's concerns about
that word to the other half and he snorted and said that the lighting in
hotels rooms was often so 'subtle' you could barely read by it!

I'm so well brung up that I automatically cap and dot initials but it seemed
to jar on everyone and capping the I of iron definitely put the cat amongst
the pigeons, it definitely wasn't called for. I will edit more carefully in
future.
Ta for that!
Trish


----- Original Message -----
From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, March 10, 2003 3:56 PM
Subject: Re: New Sub:Note From A Hotel


> Hi Trish,
> I like the poem! (And the comments about having iron and not Iron seem
> sensible - since the things in the previous sentence ain't got caps
either).
> Subtle's an interesting word as well... there's so much unsubtlety in the
> uniformity of light fitting styles and shades in the rooms! I initially
read
> the word with hints of irony: LOL!
> I'm also interested that you've broken a line and put "and shampoo" on an
> indented line that follows on...
> ... and are the extra gaps between "that" and "you" ... Are they
> intentional?
> The whole piece gives me a feeling of the displacement that I feel when
> staying in such places. I also like the fact that I'm discovering
different
> interpretations of how to read the last line - but in each one I feel it
is
> the "me" of the poem in the Hotel room... and, so, I wonder if that aligns
> with the point you made about it being someone else.
> Bob
>
>
>
>
>
>
> >From: Trish Harewood <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New Sub:Note From  A Hotel
> >Date: Fri, 7 Mar 2003 20:33:06 -0000
> >
> >Note From A Hotel
> >
> >Something about this place
> >has followed me everywhere.
> >The white towels, tiny soaps
> >                            and  shampoo
> >I have seen somewhere before.
> >The T.V. Iron and subtle lighting
> >could be from anywhere.
> >Only the feeling that  you should be here
> >comes from nowhere.
> >
> >Trish
>
>
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