Thanks, Gary. Always glad of new ideas.
Colin
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Sunday, March 09, 2003 3:16 PM
Subject: Re: newsub/neon
Colin, well done, but I wonder if a couple of less modifiers would increase
the power
Neon night flares and fills the vacant brain. (cut night and vacant)
Blocks of light move up and down
to make the smoggy air glow (a noun alternative for smoggy, such as smog)
with the colour of a thousand flowers.
They bloom and burst and overpower
with their ecstatic life.
Thanks.
Gary
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