e mails went walkabout (should be no lines beween lines)
hope posts on most at least readable - I'll double check
a pinko is a derisory term for a left thinking person
am trying the plural (perhaps should be "pinkos"
elephants cos these aircraft are big
there's some song about "ever seen an elephant fly"
Dumbo is a pink elephant form disney film
George Bush-Blair might be dumb
- these things jumped out at me as I wrote it so does need me to look at in
again
Thanks
tony
----- Original Message -----
From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, March 07, 2003 5:20 PM
Subject: Re: from pinko to david (second draft)
> Hi Tony,
> Not an easy poem to say things about... but I think the poem starts with:
> "no churned body for today's chat show hosts
>
> as elephants land again
>
> "Don't the soft pinkoes know it's a dun' deal?"
>
> (At least that's where the rhymical words seem to get going. The earlier
> lines seem weak.) (And should there be lines between your lines? Or are
you
> posting in RTF - or cutting & pasting from another document that's got
it's
> own hidden formatting rules?). (It's not easy to read...)
> But, in the poem, I don't know who's who: who a pinko is, or David is, and
> I'm guessing Tony is you! (I guess pinkoes is plural of pinko...)
> But I like the line:
> "Wake up Tony and smell the napalm"
> That's intruiging! Though the rest is a tad beyond me... (even if I try
and
> link pink and elephants... or try and think things through, linking Dumbo
> with bombers and then back to elephants...) come on gizza clue! What's
going
> on?
> Bob
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
> >From: Tony <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: from pinko to david (second draft)
> >Date: Tue, 4 Mar 2003 09:36:30 -0000
> >
> >from pinko to david
> >
> >
> >
> >the pit of the stomach
> >
> >the denied moist eye
> >
> >the elephantine power
> >
> >
> >
> >placard-waving at Fairford's gate we were then too late
> >
> >first Gulf War we together saw
> >
> >bombers'
> >
> >black
> >
> >shadows
> >
> >
> >
> >no churned body for today's chat show hosts
> >
> >as elephants land again
> >
> >"Don't the soft pinkoes know it's a dun' deal?"
> >
> >
> >
> >"Dun, deal? Over my dead body it's a dun deal"
> >
> >"Wake up Tony and smell the napalm."
> >
> >Call us what you like but
> >
> >pass us handkerchiefs
> >
> >pass back our voice
> >
> >you can be Dumbo but rename us all, David
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >written by Tony Hillier of Swindon on 3 March 2003 on receiving the
> >breaking news of stealth bombers creeping into Fairford RAF base UK.
>
>
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