Good suggestions Christina. I've read around a few pantoums and you get
poets like John Ashberry keeping the form though subverting the rhyme
sequence, which appeals to me. However, I feel the Marx Brothers subject
benefits from the traditional sequencing. Many thanks as usual.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Full Marx
>Date: Fri, 7 Mar 2003 14:49:32 EST
>
>I think this needs a lot of concentration on the rhythm and language of
>each
>line, James. If you can really sharpen it up it'll be ace. Good subject
>for
>a pantoum. I wonder whether a regular rhythm would help? Or possibly
>lines
>that didn't set up the expectation of a regular rhythm?
>bw
>christina
>
>
> >
> > FULL MARX
> >
> > Their gags were all in black and white
> > burst full of love from the silver screen;
> > when motion pictures flickered fresh light
> > Harpo strummed out the pain in between.
> >
> > Burst full of love from the silver screen
> > Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> > smoothed out the pain in between
> > as their routines streamed out for the kill.
> >
> > Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> > with plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness.
> > As their routines went in for the kill
> > there in Lydia's tattoos dwelt no sadness.
> >
> > With plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness
> > the ridiculous made more sense than sense,
> > for in Lydia's tattoos there dwelt no sadness
> > when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense.
> >
> > The ridiculous made more sense than sense
> > when motion pictures flickered fresh light,
> > and when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense
> > their gags were all in black and white.
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
>
>
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