Hi Gary
There are some beautiful images here, esp. liked the first and second
couplets. Still, I was left wondering, if I understand correctly the hint in
"first ring" then the time is even before marriage which should have an
entirely different feeling. This poem feels to me like the mood of an old
man, something like Ecclesiastes.
Tammara
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, January 07, 2003 4:19 AM
Subject: Companion to a Lost Work revised
Companion to a Lost Work
stone words crush to dust
against our empty spaces
iron will rust copper
fueled by lack of heat
the void cold lime
nibbles into each dry pour
and time slips unfinished
our tools broken
before the first ring
slide on your finger
Jan Jenifer Lawerence at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html ---
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sí, balas no!
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