Yes, it's a great line about the Napalm
And I like, " Call us what you like but pass us hankerchiefs" Glad you told
us what it's about though the idea, "stealth bombers? You must have seen
pink elephants!" does suggest itself.
Definitely worth remarking on, the arrival of the Bombers,that is.
Best wishes,
Trish
----- Original Message -----
From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, March 07, 2003 5:20 PM
Subject: Re: from pinko to david (second draft)
> Hi Tony,
> Not an easy poem to say things about... but I think the poem starts with:
> "no churned body for today's chat show hosts
>
> as elephants land again
>
> "Don't the soft pinkoes know it's a dun' deal?"
>
> (At least that's where the rhymical words seem to get going. The earlier
> lines seem weak.) (And should there be lines between your lines? Or are
you
> posting in RTF - or cutting & pasting from another document that's got
it's
> own hidden formatting rules?). (It's not easy to read...)
> But, in the poem, I don't know who's who: who a pinko is, or David is, and
> I'm guessing Tony is you! (I guess pinkoes is plural of pinko...)
> But I like the line:
> "Wake up Tony and smell the napalm"
> That's intruiging! Though the rest is a tad beyond me... (even if I try
and
> link pink and elephants... or try and think things through, linking Dumbo
> with bombers and then back to elephants...) come on gizza clue! What's
going
> on?
> Bob
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
> >From: Tony <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: from pinko to david (second draft)
> >Date: Tue, 4 Mar 2003 09:36:30 -0000
> >
> >from pinko to david
> >
> >
> >
> >the pit of the stomach
> >
> >the denied moist eye
> >
> >the elephantine power
> >
> >
> >
> >placard-waving at Fairford's gate we were then too late
> >
> >first Gulf War we together saw
> >
> >bombers'
> >
> >black
> >
> >shadows
> >
> >
> >
> >no churned body for today's chat show hosts
> >
> >as elephants land again
> >
> >"Don't the soft pinkoes know it's a dun' deal?"
> >
> >
> >
> >"Dun, deal? Over my dead body it's a dun deal"
> >
> >"Wake up Tony and smell the napalm."
> >
> >Call us what you like but
> >
> >pass us handkerchiefs
> >
> >pass back our voice
> >
> >you can be Dumbo but rename us all, David
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >written by Tony Hillier of Swindon on 3 March 2003 on receiving the
> >breaking news of stealth bombers creeping into Fairford RAF base UK.
>
>
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