Thanks Colin. These darned pantoums are harder than they look. Its had a
tidy since I posted it and looks like it could do with a tidy still.
bw
James
>From: Colin dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Full Marx
>Date: Thu, 6 Mar 2003 17:18:18 -0000
>
>James,
>
>This is a difficult exercise done cleverly. It's what you would expect from
>someone who loves the art of poetry. However conspicuous artistry intrudes
>IMO and it's lasting value may be what it empowers you to do in future
>poems.
>
>
>Colin
>
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Wednesday, March 05, 2003 8:43 AM
>Subject: New sub: Full Marx
>
>
> > This is a departure for me. And yes, it's a pantoum. Your reactions
>welcome.
> >
> > FULL MARX
> >
> > Their gags were all in black and white
> > burst full of love from the silver screen;
> > when motion pictures flickered fresh light
> > Harpo strummed out the pain in between.
> >
> > Burst full of love from the silver screen
> > Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> > smoothed out the pain in between
> > as their routines streamed out for the kill.
> >
> > Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> > with plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness.
> > As their routines went in for the kill
> > there in Lydia's tattoos dwelt no sadness.
> >
> > With plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness
> > the ridiculous made more sense than sense,
> > for in Lydia's tattoos there dwelt no sadness
> > when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense.
> >
> > The ridiculous made more sense than sense
> > when motion pictures flickered fresh light,
> > and when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense
> > their gags were all in black and white.
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
> >
> >
> >
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