Thank you for the welcome, Terri. My foot is now back firmly on the ground.
Thanks for your very kind words, too. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that you
feel (as I hoped) that the form complements the subject matter.
S6 refers to the illicit nature of the relationship - but, of course,
there's nothing in the poem or title to make this explicit, so you couldn't
possibly know that! I think it's back to the drawing board for the title.
Best wishes,
Sarah
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From: "alderoak" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, March 06, 2003 10:08 PM
Subject: Re: New sub - Our Song
> I wondered, as I began reading it, if I would like this - but by S4 I am
> quite captivated.
> It has the repetitiveness of a villanelle - and is probably better
entitled
> 'Our Dance'. The musical references, which gradually intensify, carry the
> more philosophical message all the better for being encased in something
so
> rhythmic, rhyming and repetitive.
>
> It holds that intensity in S5 - but I am not sure that s6 is quite as
> interesting - it feels a bit negative and hard to get hold of.
>
> Hope that helps
>
> Terri )O(
>
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