James,
This is a difficult exercise done cleverly. It's what you would expect from
someone who loves the art of poetry. However conspicuous artistry intrudes
IMO and it's lasting value may be what it empowers you to do in future
poems.
Colin
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From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, March 05, 2003 8:43 AM
Subject: New sub: Full Marx
> This is a departure for me. And yes, it's a pantoum. Your reactions
welcome.
>
> FULL MARX
>
> Their gags were all in black and white
> burst full of love from the silver screen;
> when motion pictures flickered fresh light
> Harpo strummed out the pain in between.
>
> Burst full of love from the silver screen
> Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> smoothed out the pain in between
> as their routines streamed out for the kill.
>
> Chico, Harpo and Groucho's wild vaudville
> with plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness.
> As their routines went in for the kill
> there in Lydia's tattoos dwelt no sadness.
>
> With plots that made sane Kafkaesque madness
> the ridiculous made more sense than sense,
> for in Lydia's tattoos there dwelt no sadness
> when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense.
>
> The ridiculous made more sense than sense
> when motion pictures flickered fresh light,
> and when Groucho wooed the fair Hortense
> their gags were all in black and white.
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>
> bw
> James
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