Thank you for your comments, Arthur. Pick away! I wouldn't have posted the
thing if I hadn't wanted to know what people really thought about it. I did
mean that free verse seems to be more popular here -
as it is generally at the moment. I don't know the name of this form, but I
expect it has one; if anyone knows what it is, I'd love to hear.

As for endlessness - I remember that if a record was damaged the needle
would often get stuck, playing the same part of the tune over and over
again, until someone lifted it off and past the blockage. It just struck me
that some relationships are like that - repeating the same actions and
responses over and over again, unable to move on beyond an area of 'damage'.
In a sense, the damage makes the groove 'endless'.

Sarah


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From: "arthur seeley" <[log in to unmask]>


> What most people here favour?? I imagine you mean that most of the work is
> free form, Sarah. Or at least appears to be. Thinking back you are
probably
> right, if that is what you mean, but I don't think that means that form is
> frowned upon.
> I am not sure of the name of the particular form you have used here. It
> clearly is a form with its repetitions and rhymes. I am sure you will tell
> me-or someone will. Repetitions are fine and properly chosen ring like
bells
> in a piece and take on deeper and deeper meaning and resonance as the poem
> continues. This is a good read and a fine poem for your first offering.
> I hate to pick at other's work but is the groove on a record disc
> 'endless'?? Can't think of an alternative to offer though. Regards Arthur