Thanks Bob,

I think you have the theme, with some good points for me as a bonus.


Colin
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From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, March 04, 2003 8:56 PM
Subject: Re: newsub/forest


> Hi Colin,
> I'm wondering if this is the draft of the poem a few commenters thought
> wasn't saying too much. I find it's subtle, talking of both eco-systems
and
> the human condition (Wow! Now there's a statement). It seems there's big
> things happening under the surface of what's being described. It feels as
> though it belongs to a world under threat.
> I find the 2 (or is it 3) questions at the end a tad awkward tho... I sort
> of feel I'd be happier if there was a way of making it all into one
> question...
> Bob
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> >From: Colin dewar <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: newsub/forest
> >Date: Wed, 26 Feb 2003 22:18:35 -0000
> >
> >From Forest to Plain
> >
> >
> >Had our leaving been foreseen
> >we might have looked more dearly
> >on the solid forest branches,
> >the short distances
> >peopled by orchids and swooping birds,
> >have loved more before we left them
> >the waterfalls through undergrowth,
> >the homeward paths made firm
> >by familiar feet.
> >We might have wandered more wistfully
> >among monkeys we believed were gods,
> >attended the departing of  fleet deer -
> >ancestors we heard but did not see.
> >
> >But these open plains came as a surprise.
> >We had sought the sun one day
> >and found ourselves here instead,
> >in more space
> >even than the trees had held.
> >Do they really go on for ever,
> >these seas of grass?
> >Where will we voyage
> >and how will we measure our lives
> >when the clouds drift so indifferently by?
> >
> >
> >
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