Gary,
Thanks. Something to think about.
Colin
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, March 04, 2003 4:35 PM
Subject: Re: newsub/forest
We might have wandered more wistfully
among monkeys we believed were gods,
attended the departing of fleet deer -
ancestors we heard but did not see.
-Colin
Colin, good work. I would look at the short lines. I see this working in
lines of even length, a block if you will.
I'm not sure about ending on the questions. The better end might be even
than the trees had held with the questions earlier.
Thanks.
Gary
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