Hi Colin,
I'm wondering if this is the draft of the poem a few commenters thought
wasn't saying too much. I find it's subtle, talking of both eco-systems and
the human condition (Wow! Now there's a statement). It seems there's big
things happening under the surface of what's being described. It feels as
though it belongs to a world under threat.
I find the 2 (or is it 3) questions at the end a tad awkward tho... I sort
of feel I'd be happier if there was a way of making it all into one
question...
Bob
>From: Colin dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: newsub/forest
>Date: Wed, 26 Feb 2003 22:18:35 -0000
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>From Forest to Plain
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>
>Had our leaving been foreseen
>we might have looked more dearly
>on the solid forest branches,
>the short distances
>peopled by orchids and swooping birds,
>have loved more before we left them
>the waterfalls through undergrowth,
>the homeward paths made firm
>by familiar feet.
>We might have wandered more wistfully
>among monkeys we believed were gods,
>attended the departing of fleet deer -
>ancestors we heard but did not see.
>
>But these open plains came as a surprise.
>We had sought the sun one day
>and found ourselves here instead,
>in more space
>even than the trees had held.
>Do they really go on for ever,
>these seas of grass?
>Where will we voyage
>and how will we measure our lives
>when the clouds drift so indifferently by?
>
>
>
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